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Friday, October 23, 2015
Project 2 Final Draft
Here is the link to my final draft of my essay for project two
Here is the link please enjoy.
Thursday, October 22, 2015
Punctuation Pt 2
In the following blog I respond to three more topic about punctuation.
The apostrophe:
Whenever I type out or write "it's" I always say in my head "it is" that way I find that I never really mess up "its" and "it's". Also your and you're, the most commonly pointed out error on social media, I never found that I ever had trouble with
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The apostrophe:
Whenever I type out or write "it's" I always say in my head "it is" that way I find that I never really mess up "its" and "it's". Also your and you're, the most commonly pointed out error on social media, I never found that I ever had trouble with
- Mack was singing about how “there’s gold in them hills!”
- This excerpt from my essay shows how the apostrophe in There's abbreviates "there is"
Quotation marks:
This section added a little bit of humor to this homework session. Not from the text itself but from the use of what the text is talking about. The sarcasm that quotes can infer came me chuckle a little bit. As far as using quotation marks, I have sometimes had trouble with it, but this helped clear it up for me.
- When the interviewer asks Tarantino what he believes about film vs digital, he says passionately says “I think it’s the death key… I think it’s the death rattle”.
- This is a good example of how I use quotes in my essay.
Other punctuation marks:
The only part of tis sections that is even relevant to my situation and rhetorical analysis is the brackets and ellipses marks. An ellipses is a way to show that the author has eliminated words from the quote that they are employing. Also brackets can be helpful in that they can show that an author has replaced or added a word to the quote in order to clarify or imply something.
Saturday, October 17, 2015
Paragraph analysis 2
In the following blog post I include a link to the paragraph analysis for my essay draft
Here is the link to my essay with the paragraph analysis.
Doing the following exercise I learned the following about my Essay
Strengths:
After revising my essay's intro and conclusions they have become a strength of my paper.
The main points of my paragraphs are clear and present
The presentation of ethos and pathos are clear and present in the paragraphs.
the explanations of the issue and why Tarantino's strategies are helpful or not helpful are good and clear.
Weaknesses
My main weakness is paragraph length, I struggled with the length of the explanation of the controversy, it was too long and had too many un--needed sentences and repeat phrases. Then the explanation of pathos is too short a paragraph and needs more explanation.
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| Screenshot taken by Dylan Cotter 10/17/15 "analysis" Public Domain Usage |
Here is the link to my essay with the paragraph analysis.
Doing the following exercise I learned the following about my Essay
Strengths:
After revising my essay's intro and conclusions they have become a strength of my paper.
The main points of my paragraphs are clear and present
The presentation of ethos and pathos are clear and present in the paragraphs.
the explanations of the issue and why Tarantino's strategies are helpful or not helpful are good and clear.
Weaknesses
My main weakness is paragraph length, I struggled with the length of the explanation of the controversy, it was too long and had too many un--needed sentences and repeat phrases. Then the explanation of pathos is too short a paragraph and needs more explanation.
Revised Conclusion
In the following blog post I revise my conclusion and compare it to the old conclusion I had.
Here is the link to the draft of the essay with the new conclusion.
Here is the link to the essay with the old conclusion.
This new conclusion sums up the essay perfectly in my opinion. And more specifically it answers the "so what" question that the previous one does not. This makes the conclusion much more relevant and it makes it service the topic more than the last one.
Here is the link to the draft of the essay with the new conclusion.
Here is the link to the essay with the old conclusion.
This new conclusion sums up the essay perfectly in my opinion. And more specifically it answers the "so what" question that the previous one does not. This makes the conclusion much more relevant and it makes it service the topic more than the last one.
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| Screenshot taken by Dylan Cotter 10/17/15 "conclusion" Public Domain Usage |
Revised introduction
In the following blog post I link my new introduction for my essay.
I totally deleted my entire thesis and intro after the class on Thursday. I needed to rethink the topic and make my essay more focused on the topic. This intro is a lot more focused and is much more about the topic than the last one. It focuses a lot more on what the topic and the assignment is.
Here is the link to the new and improved intro.
Here is the link to the old and boring intro.
I totally deleted my entire thesis and intro after the class on Thursday. I needed to rethink the topic and make my essay more focused on the topic. This intro is a lot more focused and is much more about the topic than the last one. It focuses a lot more on what the topic and the assignment is.
Here is the link to the new and improved intro.
Here is the link to the old and boring intro.
Friday, October 16, 2015
Reflection on Project 2 Draft
I peer reviewed Nick and Carter's Essays
Do you have an identifiable thesis? Does it point into the rhetorical strategies you analyze?
My thesis is clear and apparent to the readers. However after class yesterday I do need to rework it and make it more about the actual topic of the assignment and make it clearer.
How did you decide to organize your essay? Is it supported with evidence?
I organized my essay into 3 paragraphs. The first one is some background information about the controversy. The second examines the use of Pathos and the third paragraph examines the use of Ethos.
Yes they are supported with evidence, there is plenty of evidence for the two techniques in this text. And I feel like I did a solid job of finding evidence but I think I can strengthen it.
Did you clearly identify and analyze several important elements of the text's rhetorical strategy?
In the essay I identify and discuss the authors credibility, their expertise, their use of pathos and ethos, also their use of expert opinions and appeal to emotion. I used evidence and analysis to discuss how each part is either helpful or hurtful to the argument.
Did you explain how and why certain rhetorical strategies were employed? Did you discuss what effects these strategies have on the intended audience and the overall effectiveness of the text?
Honestly I could defiantly do better at this one. I discuss of they are affective or not, but I lack in why they were employed or what effects it has on the audience.
Are you thoughtfully using evidence in each paragraph? Do yo mention specific examples from the text and explain why they are relevant?
In sort, yes. I believe I did and I think I used it effectively. I made an effort to use specific examples and believe that this is necessary for this assignment and so I believe I did this effectively.
When a quote is employed, I summarized and provide contextual evidence to why this was necessary and effective or harmful to the argument.
Do you leave your reader wanting more? Do you answer the so what question in your conclusion?
I believe my paper covers all the bullets on this assignment and would provide exactly what the professor was looking for in this fictional world where I was asked to complete this assignment. Then my conclusion will address that so what question and why Tarantino's lack of logos hurt his argument when I revise it.
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| Screenshot taken by Dylan Cotter 10/16/15 "pathos" Public Domain Usage |
Do you have an identifiable thesis? Does it point into the rhetorical strategies you analyze?
My thesis is clear and apparent to the readers. However after class yesterday I do need to rework it and make it more about the actual topic of the assignment and make it clearer.
How did you decide to organize your essay? Is it supported with evidence?
I organized my essay into 3 paragraphs. The first one is some background information about the controversy. The second examines the use of Pathos and the third paragraph examines the use of Ethos.
Yes they are supported with evidence, there is plenty of evidence for the two techniques in this text. And I feel like I did a solid job of finding evidence but I think I can strengthen it.
Did you clearly identify and analyze several important elements of the text's rhetorical strategy?
In the essay I identify and discuss the authors credibility, their expertise, their use of pathos and ethos, also their use of expert opinions and appeal to emotion. I used evidence and analysis to discuss how each part is either helpful or hurtful to the argument.
Did you explain how and why certain rhetorical strategies were employed? Did you discuss what effects these strategies have on the intended audience and the overall effectiveness of the text?
Honestly I could defiantly do better at this one. I discuss of they are affective or not, but I lack in why they were employed or what effects it has on the audience.
Are you thoughtfully using evidence in each paragraph? Do yo mention specific examples from the text and explain why they are relevant?
In sort, yes. I believe I did and I think I used it effectively. I made an effort to use specific examples and believe that this is necessary for this assignment and so I believe I did this effectively.
When a quote is employed, I summarized and provide contextual evidence to why this was necessary and effective or harmful to the argument.
Do you leave your reader wanting more? Do you answer the so what question in your conclusion?
I believe my paper covers all the bullets on this assignment and would provide exactly what the professor was looking for in this fictional world where I was asked to complete this assignment. Then my conclusion will address that so what question and why Tarantino's lack of logos hurt his argument when I revise it.
Wednesday, October 14, 2015
punctuation part 1
In the following blog post I analyze the points outlined in my Rules for Writers book.
Unnecessary commas:
Sometimes you are just on an absolute tear of a sentence and you have so much to add to it and you never want it to stop and, and, and... Commas are your friend, but only until a certain point. The examples that they provide in the book make it clear that if the part after the comma could be a sentence, it should be sentence. Those examples of independent clauses make sense to me and hopefully will help me avoid the run ons in the future.
Extra or Other punctuation marks
Using punctuation marks like dashes or slashes can add some flare and personality to your writing, as well as serving a literary purpose. However I include this part in this post because i found out some weird facts that I never knew nor have even been corrected on. For example if you are going to use a dash (-) in your writing, you actually need to use two of them (--) for some reason. Interesting.
End Punctuation
Finishing a sentence is an art form. If you include an exclamation mark, you could be forever branded as that guy who uses that exclamation mark. I don't know why, but it is frowned upon in an academic setting. My mother uses exclamation marks all the time in her texts which makes it seem like she is always yelling at me, so I can see how this would be a bad thing to do in an academic paper. The book reinforces this, as well as pointing out that ending sentence with a question mark can be bad, can't it?
Reflection:
I did a peer review of Nick and Carter's essay drafts. I found that the un--needed commas were the biggest problem in most of their drafts as well as mine. It causes run on sentences and makes the reader lose interest because of the length of the sentences. From Nicks essay "Nevertheless, for those interested in the topic of geoengineering, namely “solar geoengineering” (as Keith calls it), or those in support of the methods, the ideas presented by Keith in the interview may be solid evidence of reliable and credible information." While this is a solid sentence, the commas make it way to long. Also for end punctuation section of this blog post, the question marks in their posts work well, unlike what the book said. From Carter's essay "The requirements are supreme and the dedication is plenty too much, but is the payout worth it?" It punctuates it nicely and gets his point across.
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| Screenshot taken by Dylan Cotter "punctuation" 10/14/2015 Public Domain Usage |
Unnecessary commas:
Sometimes you are just on an absolute tear of a sentence and you have so much to add to it and you never want it to stop and, and, and... Commas are your friend, but only until a certain point. The examples that they provide in the book make it clear that if the part after the comma could be a sentence, it should be sentence. Those examples of independent clauses make sense to me and hopefully will help me avoid the run ons in the future.
Extra or Other punctuation marks
Using punctuation marks like dashes or slashes can add some flare and personality to your writing, as well as serving a literary purpose. However I include this part in this post because i found out some weird facts that I never knew nor have even been corrected on. For example if you are going to use a dash (-) in your writing, you actually need to use two of them (--) for some reason. Interesting.
End Punctuation
Finishing a sentence is an art form. If you include an exclamation mark, you could be forever branded as that guy who uses that exclamation mark. I don't know why, but it is frowned upon in an academic setting. My mother uses exclamation marks all the time in her texts which makes it seem like she is always yelling at me, so I can see how this would be a bad thing to do in an academic paper. The book reinforces this, as well as pointing out that ending sentence with a question mark can be bad, can't it?
Reflection:
I did a peer review of Nick and Carter's essay drafts. I found that the un--needed commas were the biggest problem in most of their drafts as well as mine. It causes run on sentences and makes the reader lose interest because of the length of the sentences. From Nicks essay "Nevertheless, for those interested in the topic of geoengineering, namely “solar geoengineering” (as Keith calls it), or those in support of the methods, the ideas presented by Keith in the interview may be solid evidence of reliable and credible information." While this is a solid sentence, the commas make it way to long. Also for end punctuation section of this blog post, the question marks in their posts work well, unlike what the book said. From Carter's essay "The requirements are supreme and the dedication is plenty too much, but is the payout worth it?" It punctuates it nicely and gets his point across.
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